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Elfen Lied Story written by me *Spoilers*
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by DevilishEyes
on 2006-02-03 12:58:04
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I was bored (downloading was sooo slow) so I've written the story of Elfen Lied for a part. Here goes! Please tell me what you think about it before I write the complete anime, and find out it is crap! Elfen Lied Os iusti meditabitur sapientiam Et lingua eius loquetur iudicium Beatus vir qui suffert tentationem Quoniam cum probatus fuerit accipiet coronam vitae Kyrie, Ignis Divine, Eleison O quam sancta, quam serena, quam benigna Quam amoena O castitatis lilium The mouth of the Just shall meditate wisdom And his tongue shall speak judgement Blessed is the man that endured temptation For when he hath been proved he shall receive a crown of life Lord, Fire Divine, have mercy O how holy, how calm, how benign How pleasant, O lily of purity ENCOUNTER “D-don’t move! Stop it!†the guard shouted. A girl, tied to a vertical bed with … and a metal helmet, preventing her from seeing anything, looked down on him. She couldn’t see him, yet see seemed to know where to look. With a sickening croak the guards head twisted and got ripped of his neck by an unseen force. With a soft splatter, the head dropped on the ground, his eyes still in a look of complete fear and horror. His colleague, shaking next to the dead body, stared at the girl and drew his gun. He tried to aim, but failed because his hands where shaking. He started to fire in the wild, but after two shots he stopped. With a grim face full of pain and disbelief, his torso shove of his legs. The key he held in his pocket floated towards the girl, and unlocked the locks that tied her. With a soft click the lock released, and the girl fell down on her hands and knees. She was completely naked and at the back of her helmet her pink hair was tied under the metal. She stood up and walked towards the exit of the room. While she walked, the metal circles around her prison bed twisted with load, metallic croaks. Blood dripped down the walls and the bended circles. Blood flooded the floor. ***** “Do you really think Kurama is that scary?†…asked. “Well, I do think he is kind of strange... in some ways,†her friend replied. “Really? He has his good sides,†… responded, “but I’ll never get promotion. When he is around, I always screw things up…†The girls both laughed. “Well, let’s go. You can bring Kurama’s coffee.†“Sure, you don’t have the guts do you?†… walked down the hallway, almost dropping the thrall with coffee and milk. ***** “So if we stay away from her, she can’t harm us?†the black-haired guard asked. He had a small gun in his hand, and he seemed to be very nervous. “We have about two meters, and we are not to drop anything. At least, that’s what the guide said.†The girl with the helmet walked towards them, stopping right before a torn body. She gazed down on the armless and headless corpse and apparently she noticed something. One of the guards, who stood three meters before her suddenly screamed in agony, then dropped dead. A blue ballpoint was shot in his skull like a bullet. The other guard looked terrified and seemed to have forgotten about the approaching girl. With a tremendous blow, the guard’s body split in two, causing an eruption of crimson fluids to paint the walls. His eyes where looking up, towards the ceiling, though he would never see again. The girl didn’t even look back when she walked through the spreading circle of blood. Her bare feet caused the red surface to move, and she left bloody footprints as the moved on. The screaming continued to echo in the long hallways. Bodies where ripped in pieces and the walls, floors and even the ceilings where stained in blood. Gunfire could be heard, followed by ripping sounds and screaming of pure pain and shock. The guns of the guards didn’t even scratch the girl. |
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Re: Elfen Lied Story written by me *Spoilers*
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by eternaltorture
on 2006-02-03 15:30:43
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hmm.. it's pretty good...i would like you continue, though, since you left off on a interesting part.... and also, correct your mistakes, they are not much.... good luck!!! |